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Some people consider price as the most impirtant thing to think about when buying products (such as cellphnes) or services (medical treatment) do you agree of disagree?

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Some people think that
price
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 is a more significant thing when purchasing goods (
such
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 as mobile phones) or services ( medical care). In my opinion, I agree that rate is most important, but I do
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 believe that the
quality
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 of
products
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 does
also
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 the most advantageous. On the one hand, the
price
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 is a significant thing when someone thinks to buy important
products
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 due to a number of reasons.
Firstly
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,
price
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 gives customers an idea about the
products
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.
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, the iPhone costs are expensive because the iPhone has high characteristics.
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,
price
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 is important for people who get a low salary, so they can take the
products
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 with low
price
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 and by that, they can buy anything, they need.
On the other hand
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, the
quality
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 of the
products
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 is
also
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 advantageous because of many reasons.
First
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, some items with little cost have a worse
quality
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 that no one can use devices for a long time.
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, electronic brush costs cheap, so the customer will use it only for one month.
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, some goods will be unsafe because of low prices with a bad trait.
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, some medical treatments are unsafe due to their
quality
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. In conclusion, both the
price
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 and the
quality
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 of the
products
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 are more advantageous.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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