IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

Some people think that government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #money #science #subjects #country #progress
Education in
this
 day and age is indispensable and contributes to the growth and prosperity of a nation.
Therefore
, countries need to invest heavily in the education sector, because it is a sector that will reap great dividends.
However
, some sections of society believe that more of the administrations' funds must be invested in the sciences as compared to other subjects. I do not agree with the notion and will substantiate my reasoning in the course of
this
 essay.
First
 and foremost, with all the diseases that are being borne into various communities, it is vital that people are educated in the sciences, so that they will be able to help identify the type of diseases and in turn develop a vaccine for it. An instance of
this
 can be seen in the current pandemic. The only reason that vaccines were developed as fast as they were, was because of the advancements in the science fields. Alternately, society is built on various skills and contributions from the citizens which help to develop a nation.
This
 can range from a simple thing, as an individual keeping a track of his budget, to another learning a language. Globalisation has created a situation where many multinational companies are setting up their offices overseas with a view of tapping into unopened markets.
Therefore
, if people can learn the language of the company, they can get jobs that help the economy grow. In conclusion, whilst the emergence of science is an important sector in the development of a society, it is not the sole area of a kingdom's development,
therefore
 the ministry needs to invest equally in all sectors for the growth of the economy.
Submitted by Nigelvictorlawrence on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • holistic development
  • technological advancements
  • critical thinking
  • cultural awareness
  • sustainable development
  • return on investment (ROI)
  • global competitiveness
  • job market
  • equitable education
  • funding allocation
  • curriculum balance
  • civic responsibilities
  • interdisciplinary approach
What to do next:
Look at other essays: