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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has been recommended by some educationalists that
children
 should start learning a foreign
language
 from primary
school
instead
 of secondary
school
.In
this
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 I will present why the advantages of
this
 outweigh the disadvantages. The obvious argument in its favour is that at a young age
children
 absorb information much more easily than teenagers. Their brains are still programmed to acquire their mother tongue which facilitates learning another
language
.
Moreover
,
children
 are naturally enthusiastic and can develop an interest in a foreign
language
 through fun and games while they are in
language
 classes Because they are usually very different from class in other subjects. So
children
 learn foreign languages better than adolescents. There are
however
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,some disadvantages.Not all countries have the facilities and teachers to offer a foreign
language
 at primary
school
.
Furthermore
,
children
 should focus on their own
language
first
. They confuse languages if they try to learn their own
language
 and a foreign one at the same time. To
conclud
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conclude
 ,
although
 learning a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 can have certain negative effects like
childen's
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children's
 confusion and lack of good teachers, it has an extremely positive influence on
children
's innate abilities and increases their enthusiasm to learn. I believe that the benefits of
this
 outweigh its drawback.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
  • proficiency levels
  • competitive job market
  • foundational skills
  • qualified teachers
  • recreational activities
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