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Band 4

We have long imagined the possibility that life exists on other planets . Do you believe that there is life in the universe outside of earth? What would be the implications of proving that alien life exists? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

With the pace of 21st-century
technology
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technology,
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is
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it has
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lept
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leapfrogged
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 to
the
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a
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 level which was unimaginable
few
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a few
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 decades ago .
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 the
advancement
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 we all
starts
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 to believe that there is life
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existence
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on other planets .
Although
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 I am
also
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 one of
the
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those
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 who argue that there is
existence
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 on the other globe , there are many ways to prove that there are creatures
out of
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on
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 the
globe
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other globe
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 .
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, there
are
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 much evidence provided by our scientists , there is
existence
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on
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of
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 another planet.
For instance
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 , as our scientists went to the moon for their research , they
find
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found
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 a footprint of any
creature
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creature,
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 they took a picture and
sample
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a sample
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 of that to the earth .
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, even though after much research on the planets , they took more steps towards the success of their goal . There are many points to give proof that
aliens
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alien
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 life exists. First and foremost ,
By
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by
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 doing more and more
researches
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research
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. To illustrate , if the researchers do many and more
researches
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research
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 like they check the oxygen , gravity and so on , they will
able
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be able
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 to prove that
their
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there
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 is the
existence
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on
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of
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 another planet .
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 , make
the
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apply
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suitable devices .
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 , in spite of doing research , the equipment should be suitable and more effective , the outcome can be
more strong
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stronger
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 and effective . In conclusion , even though by the proofs given by researchers we
comes
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 to know that
their
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there
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 is life out of the earth ,
it
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if
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 they find
more
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more,
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 they will be able to give a strong point regarding
to
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apply
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this
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grammar
Fix grammar and spell errors to make ideas clear.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph and use simple link words to show point and end.
content
Use clear facts or small examples that can be true and easy to prove.
content
The topic is clear and there is an attempt to give examples.
structure
There is some use of connecting words like 'Nevertheless' and 'For instance'.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vastness
  • statistical probability
  • habitable planets
  • Drake Equation
  • extremophiles
  • hydrothermal vents
  • monumental
  • resilience
  • adaptability
  • philosophical
  • human-centric viewpoints
  • interstellar
  • cosmos
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