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We have long imagined the possibility that life exists on other planets . Do you believe that there is life in the universe outside of earth? What would be the implications of proving that alien life exists? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

With the pace of 21st-century
technology
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technology,
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is
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it has
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lept
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leapfrogged
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 to
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 level which was unimaginable a few decades ago .
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 the
advancement
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 we all
starts
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start
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 to believe that there is
life
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existence
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apply
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on other planets .
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 I am
also
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 one of
them
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those
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 who argue that there is
existence
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 on the other globe , there are many ways to prove that there are creatures
out of
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outside
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 the globe .
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, there
are
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 much evidence provided by our scientists , there is
existence
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on
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of
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 another planet.
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 , as our scientists went to the moon for their research , they
find
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found
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 a footprint of any
creature
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creature,
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 they took a picture and
sample
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a sample
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 of that to the earth .
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, even though after much research on the planets , they took more steps towards the success of their goal . There are many points to give proof that
aliens
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alien
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life
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 exists. First and foremost ,
By
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by
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 doing more and more
researches
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research
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. To illustrate , if the researchers do many and more
researches
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research
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 like they check the oxygen , gravity and so on , they will
able
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be able
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 to prove that
their
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there
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 is the
existence
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on
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of
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 another planet .
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 , make
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apply
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suitable devices .
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 , in spite of doing research , the equipment should be suitable and more effective , the outcome can be
more strong
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stronger
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 and effective . In conclusion , even though by the proofs given by researchers we
comes
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come
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 to know that
their
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there
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 is
life
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 out of the earth ,
it
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if
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 they find
more
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more,
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 they will be able to give a strong point regarding
to
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apply
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this
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. I totally believe that there is
life
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 on another
plan
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planet
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task response
State your view in one clear line and keep it in that view. Then give why you think this.
coherence
Make each para have one main idea. Start with a clear sentence and then add why or how.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Watch verb form and dot to end sentence. Use commas when needed.
lexical
Use short words. Do not use hard words. Keep to facts and simple logic.
content
The topic is clear and the essay shows care in the subject.
content
The writer tries to give proof ideas to back points.
coherence
There are some linking words that help flow a little.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • vastness
  • statistical probability
  • habitable planets
  • Drake Equation
  • extremophiles
  • hydrothermal vents
  • monumental
  • resilience
  • adaptability
  • philosophical
  • human-centric viewpoints
  • interstellar
  • cosmos
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