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You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

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Dear
Mr.
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 Aseem I am one of your students who is attending
evenin
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evening
 classes for the french
laguage
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language
. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I am not able to continue my language course anymore. Having said that, though
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 would really
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 to continue, it is quite
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difficult
 for me to manage a
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 job and my family's responsibilities altogether. Since my husband has changed his job and he has to do a night shift, I left with no option as there would be no one to take care of my kid.
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 it takes me two hours from my office to reach the classes.
However
, your class has taught me adequate things and now
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 can carry it forward through the online course.
This
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 can look after my son and learn french at my convenience from the home. Thank you for your guidance and support
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 the time. Yours Sincerely,
Brijal
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Bridal
Brinjal
 Desai
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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