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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Recently,
wastage
 is the main
concerned
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 for the government to get rid of it. Due to the fact that accessive usage of
plastic
 and chemical companies' lethargic behaviour
rubbish
 is increasing day by day and it can be eliminated by the government's strict rules. One main cause of the
wastage
 is that
,
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people
 are using more and more
plastic
instead
 of paper bags or reusable cloth bags for daily use.
For instance
, when you go to buy some groceries,
vendor
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the vendor
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 packs all the
stuffs
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stuff
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 in a
plastic
 bag and you
thow
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throw
 it out once you reach home.
Moreover
, chemical companies, who throw their
wastage
 either in
open
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 area or to the sea which produces more
rubbish
.
People
 are not well aware of the fact that the way they are throwing
rubbish
,
it
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is only
goin
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going
 to affect ourselves only in the future. To eliminate the situation, the
governement
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government
 should start
the
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strict action.
For example
, by introducing rules for common
people
 that they should not use
plastic
 bags for daily
shoppig
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shopping
 or strict warning to these chemical companies to follow the proper
protocals
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protocols
 to get rid of their
comapny's
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company's
wastage
. There should be a recycling process to make the
rubbish
resusable
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reusable
 like
plastic
 bottles. One should get a fine if the individual or a company is not following the regulations to make the
surrounding
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 clean and tidy. So in my opinion, to keep the environment clean and healthy,
government
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the government
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 should initiate
the
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programs to make
the
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people
 aware
about
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 how to keep our mother earth garbage free.
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