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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to do work for a company or organization. What might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed

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Currently, many
people
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 prefer to be
self
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-employed
instead
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 of being employees. The reason is that we can manage our
works
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 and schedule more flexible.
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, comparing to working in a company, the disadvantage of being
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self employed
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 is that we do not have a stable
work
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 life.
People
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 tend to become
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self employed
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 because of the flexibility. Being an employer to
ourself
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 means that we would be able to manage our
work
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 and schedule as we wish.
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, common workers in Thailand have about 8 working hours, starting from 8 AM to 4 PM.
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,
in
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 average they have to spend two more hours
for
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 transportation.
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,
people
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 that choose to be
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self employed
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self-employed
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 can
work
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 for many hours they want to.
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, they do not have to waste time
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 to
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workplaces
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work places
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workplaces
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.
On the other hand
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,
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self employed
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 has more risk to lose their job. When we
work
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 in the company, there will be
works
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 for us to do all the time, but being
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self employed
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 is not, because we have to find all
works
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 by
ourself
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ourselves
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.
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, we will have less chance
in
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of
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 finding
works
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 because
people
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 who come from an organization or company will have
better
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a better
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profile
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profiles
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 and look more realizable than
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the individual
an individual
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individual
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individuals
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. In summary, flexibility
are
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 the advantage of
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self employed
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self-employed
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 which is the point that makes
this
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 type of job become popular among
people
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.
Nevertheless
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, it is not a stable job compared to being an employee which is the disadvantage that
need
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 to be considered.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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