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In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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Needless to say, we are witnessing an alarming trend of
car
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over usage
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. Starting from small towns to the metropolises, they are all full of an excessive number of vehicles on their roads.
This
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of
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this
 modern-day issue along with would-be solutions.  Nobody would argue with the fact that at the present day any consumer endeavours to obtain a
car
 by taking credit. Some individuals might consider
this
 fact as a virtue,
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 it exacerbates the situation on the roads.
Moreover
, there are various families where almost
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 member possesses a
car
 inasmuch as many of them have a hectic lifestyle. Not only is it convenient to travel to work, but it is
also
 considered to be prestigious.
However
, the government in concert with local authorities can arrive at the solution by imposing heavy taxes on petrol.
Consequently
, most families would be confined to have one automobile for the whole family. Beyond any doubt, it will reduce the number of cars, and as a knock-off effect, decrease the amount of traffic congestion.
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, in order to find an alternative
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 most avid drivers would consider switching to a bicycle, which certainly ensures the lack of potentially appalling traffic. In summary, undoubtedly, today it has become trendy and necessary to own a personal
car
.
Therefore
, the government is obligated to reduce traffic with the aid of either levying heavy taxes or supplying citizens with adequate road conditions in order to boost bicycle users among people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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