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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
A big
salary
 with
job
satisfaction
 is always being a dream of many
people
. Big
salary
 and
job
satisfaction
 both are rare to achieve by many
people
. While some
people
 think that a big
salary
 is much more important than
job
satisfaction
, I would like to argue that
job
satisfaction
 is
also
 essential for a happy life. Nowadays
people
 started to come out of their comfort zone and started earning healthy amounts. There is evidence that the cost of living has risen which cause
people
 to earn more
money
. There is a huge rise in expenditure on food, living, travelling, education, rent, hospital cost etc. In the rush of earning more
money
, individuals lose their
job
satisfaction
.
Although
 earning a huge amount is better for one living, mental peace and good health are
also
 equally important. If you don't have mental peace, it may impact your physical strength as well. It is indisputable that psychological consultation has increased than ever before. The divorce rate has
also
 increased. Which shows that there is a lot of disturbance in
people
's life.
People
 are struggling to maintain a good relationship.
Additionally
, many
people
 are not able to take out time for their loved ones. Working on weekends are very common. It is widely acknowledged that,
people
instead
 of spending time with family the spend hours on social media. Which is not good. From what we have been discussed above, we may conclude that
job
satisfaction
 is equally important to a big
salary
. What will
people
 do with only
money
 ? they
also
 need family, friends and mental balance to enjoy that
money
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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