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Write about the following topic. Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

#topic #computer #effects #children
In
this
 modern era, it is difficult to say that using a
computer
 is a bad thing or a good thing.
However
, I feel that
computer
 has more benefits
such
 as online shopping, study and even office work than cons. Can't deny the fact that
,
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computer
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the computer
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 has its own disadvantages
such
 as access use of it cause
the
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eye pain and headache. Some kids and youngsters are so addicted to
the
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electronic gadgets that they spend the whole
day
 on it and pay less attention to the study as well as it makes them isolated from the real world. For an instance, in
Japan
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 one kid had spent a
half million
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 from her mother's card just to play
a
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video games.
Moreover
, kids forget to play outside and enjoy the real fun playing with friends.
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Nevertheless
 as they said, every coin has two sides and so does
computer
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the computer
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. If people use it wisely, it is more useful in our
day
 to
day
 life and makes our life convenient and easier. Since the
day
 Covid-19 hits, 90% of the population is working from home and still
erning
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earning
 money.
Education
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 system has no adverse
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affect
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effect
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 as they are providing online classes.
Although
 people were home quarantined, they can do online shopping and things can be easily delivered
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to their respective places. Within a couple of minutes, you can reach anywhere in the world
hassle free
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, be it socially or professionally or just to order your favourite
dises
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dishes
. I believe that even though using
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computer
comupter
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 is not good
everytime
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, it has adequate reasons to use it for
the
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 better purpose. If one can
acess
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access
 the electronic book in a way it has
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positve
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positive
 impact than the negative.
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