One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Due to the advancement of technology,
people
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the population
care
facility
. So, due to improved medical Fix the agreement mistake
facilities
care
facility, death rates has
decreased. Change the verb form
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This
essay will discuss both merits and demerits of this
development. In my own perspective, demerits are more as compared to merits.
To commence with, there are some advantages of this
belief. First
and foremost is that,
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youngster
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youngsters
want
to have Change the verb form
wants
baby
late because they want to Add an article
a baby
fulfill
their dreams and desires before baby plan. So, if grandparents are living longer Change the spelling
fulfil
then
they teach moral values to grandchildren properly that youngsters can not teach easily. For instance
, in the modern era, moral values are eradicating because people
become more moderate and they want to update with latest
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the latest
trend
. Fix the agreement mistake
trends
Moreover
, both parents are working nowadays, they do not have to take care
of their babies. So, they have to keep nany
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any
for
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to
take
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taking
care
of babies. Thus
, at that time, grandparents can take care
of grandchildren without any hesitation and they have to spend quality of
time with them in order to remove loneliness.
On the paradoxical side, there are many drawbacks pf Change preposition
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this
development. Firstly
, if medical care
facility
will improve Fix the agreement mistake
facilities
then
population
of Correct article usage
the population
people
will also
have inclined due to advancement
of technology. It has Correct article usage
the advancement
detrimental
effect on Add an article
a detrimental
government
because they have to give pensions to all old age Correct article usage
the government
people
. Therefore
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the money
government
. Correct article usage
the government
Furthermore
, more staff member
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medical
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the medical
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the patient
a patient
patient
. Due to Fix the agreement mistake
patients
which
, most of Correct pronoun usage
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money
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the money
salaries
of staff members. Apart from it, Correct article usage
the salaries
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the youngster
a youngster
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will have more burden Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
of
their parents related to medicines and some other things. Nowadays, Change preposition
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responsibility
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the responsibility
of
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for
people
.
To conclude, although
there are more drawbacks of this
development but
there are some merits that can not be overlooked. If old Remove the conjunction
apply
people
live longer they teach moral values to their grandchildren while baby sitting
of them but Correct your spelling
babysitting
population
will have increased and government should have to spend money on pensions and salaries.Add an article
the population
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