Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in team, while other people think that take part in individual sports is better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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who
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on
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.
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, almost everyone who decides on what kind of
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he or she will spend all the free time faces a choice one of two large categories of all types of
sports
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. People can decide to take part in
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sport
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, like boxing, tennis or even horse riding. At the same time, there
USA
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vast range of diversity of team
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,
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as
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ball or volleyball.
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, all persons who
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in
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are divided into two groups. Both these views are presented in
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, it is important to notice that individual
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 are useful for concentration.
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, there are more benefits for children and teenagers. Running, boxing or even chess and other kinds of
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in which a person plays alone can prepare young people for their adult life.
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extra-curricular activities show that everyone should rely only on themselves.
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, it can provide issues with communication.
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, all
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that require playing in teams often lead to arguments between players.
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situations can be especially stressful for teenagers
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mentality is not robust enough. Though, many studies of psychologists show that children who are fascinated about team kinds of
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have
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problems with anger and communication in their
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life. In conclusion, it is crucial to say that any
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should be suitable for the person.
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, it means that the most essential thing is the child's comfort and pleasure.
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, the kind of
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should be chosen taking into account the child's features. Only in
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case
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will give any benefits.
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