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Some people think children's spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it is bad. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #time #tv #video #pc #games
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According to some views,
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, movies, and
PC
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games
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 have a good influence on
children
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. At the same
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, other people say, that these leisures have a bad influence on youngsters' development.
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 essay will discuss both sides of views to
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 opinion. From my perspective, the shortcomings of that entertainments are obvious. On the one hand, the reasons why some people are convinced, that
TV
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,
PC
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games
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, and
video
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 have a positive impact on kids are, because, current media for infants are mostly based on an educational program. During
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 entertainment, youngsters receive access to learn different pieces of knowledge, like mathematics, physics, even new languages. All these educational processes go through the fun and
games
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, accompanied by songs and lyrics. On another hand, during the
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, when
children
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 are involved with mentioned processes, parents receive free
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 for themselves and relaxation. And these are main reasons why some parents have not been paying needed attention to obvious disadvantages of discussed entertainments.
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, despite some positive influences, negatives impacts from
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,
video
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, and
PC
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games
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 are more destructive to the weak
children
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’s nervous system. According to nowadays psychological research,
children
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, who have spent more
time
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 watching
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/
video
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 or playing
PC
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games
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, have less developed speaking ability than their peers.
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, the concentration and self-education abilities could suffer in the same way.
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, if the situation did not improve, it might be caused to different problems in the future, not only at school life but at university life too. Taking above mentioned into account, bad consequences for
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 from watching
video
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 and
TV
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 programs, and from playing
PC
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games
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 are significantly bigger than the positive impact of these entertainments. In my opinion, the bad sides of that kind of leisure make them inappropriate for
children
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 and parents should avoid them as long as they can.
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