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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Few people
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 that certain
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up-gradation
 in climate change would be adverse for business, whereas certain others say that it would be rather an opportunity for the
businesses
. I actually do believe that
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 would provide the corporate world with viable options
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 so that they can amend their
way
 of work. I would explain my
reasonings
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reasoning
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 for
this
 below.
Firstly
, manufacturing firms would
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integrate
 ethical
way
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 of working into their system, which would
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 help the environment.
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 completely bans
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 of plastic in
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 products.
Secondly
, consumers are
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 about the damage happening to the environment due to
production
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 of ample
of
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waste materials through
production
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 of products.
Hence
, they support and go with the organisation which can help them achieve
sustainable
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a sustainable
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 environment.
Thirdly
, strict regulation by
government
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the government
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 would help the
businesses
 to amend the
way
 of their work, which in turn would provide the
businesses
 to raise
green
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the green
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 flag for doing business.
However
, there are certain concerns too. As some of the organisation do not have any other go rather than using the traditional method of production, would have to close off their
businesses
.
Similarly
, the investment costs to change their
way
 of working would create unending debts for the firm's which would
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 create turmoil for them. To conclude, though there are certain disadvantages to these changes. I do certainly believe that the advantages of
this
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 the
disdavantages
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disadvantages
disadvantage
 that it has to offer.
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