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Now a days the governments are spending more on science relates subjects as they think that this improves the development of a nations. Do you agree or disagree with this.

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There is no doubt that the governments are investing more time
on
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science
 since they believe it helps the
nation
's growth. In my essay, I will explain the reasons for their interest
on
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science
, and how it connects to the best interest of the
country
.
To begin
 with, exploration leads to discovery and commercial implementation of the discovery results in innovation.
This
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 product innovations help the
nation
's
economy
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 growth.
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, the growth of communication is much advanced while comparing to the past. Everyone uses
cell
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a cell
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phone
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phones
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, Wi-Fi to access all information around the world.
Hence
, it increases the profit of the communication service providers, and they contribute to the
country
 by paying taxes, which accumulates to
certain
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 percentage of total
gdp
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GDP
.
Secondly
, innovation in medical
science
 requires experimentation to find
better
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a better
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 cure with
less
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side-effects
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side effects
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.
Also
, it is crucial for any
country
 to provide
an
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appropriate medical care to their citizens. Ultimately, saving thousands of human lives.
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, Cholera killed many thousands of people and it is vaccine discovery helped to cure
such
life threatening
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 diseases.
Moreover
, it requires constant attention throughout the years to be prepared for any diseases.
Hence
, it deserves
nation's
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 time and energy
into
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it
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. To sum up, it is necessary to spend more time on
science
 for the
nation
's interest. Since it contributes to the commercial sector and in turn enhancing the
country
's financial health.
Also
, investing more
on
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 medical
science
 helps in saving human lives.
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