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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The question about the quality of education is always relevant. Someone thinks that
students
 should learn more subjects like cooking at schools and colleges to be willing to live an adult
life
. But
also
 there are people who consider there are more useful and crucial academic disciplines to study. Both these views are presented in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, schools prepare
students
 for university and college. So, it is understandable why children and teenagers choose the subjects they will need for their
further
 education. And speaking about universities, we
also
 need to comprehend that in
such
 educational institutions people learn everything they need to know for their future job.
For example
, if someone chose to be a lawyer,
this
 person prefers to spend the time getting information about laws and maybe psychology, rather than about food.
However
, almost everyone faces cooking during their adult
life
. So it would be really useful to study more about the science and preparation of food at school, college and university. It can help
students
 and make their
life
 easier when they will decide to live separately from their parents. As an example from my own
life
, I can say that in all Russian schools
students
 learn how to sew, knit and prepare food. These school subjects turned out to be more useful than I had thought. In conclusion, it is important to notice that all knowledge will be useful. Even if you do not believe in
this
 fact now. So, my opinion is that it is incredible that
students
 can get some rudimentary skills at school or college.
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