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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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Since we are living in a world where everyone is busy in their working life, they forget to do the needful workout that leads us towards the health issues. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why the working public ignores daily exercises and what are the solutions for
this
. Even though we know the importance of health, but due to the hectic schedule at the office, people tend to give less time or even no time for their daily exercise. Because of the competition at
workplace
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, employees are even afraid that if they don't perform they may lose the job.
In addition
, even if they find free time, they ignore
to do
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 exercise due to a lack of motivation. Even more, people tend to think that just not doing the workout, will give them more relaxation, but they forget that just doing jogging
by
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 5 minutes will increase their productivity and creativity. To illustrate, recently in our company it makes mandatory for employees to walk for few minutes that will help them to maintain health, and will improve
the
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their
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 productivity
of
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them
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apply
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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