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The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figures illustrate the information on why people quit
to smoke
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smoking
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 and when they want to finish that habit. It is evident that they are likely to take care of their health and amount of people end to smoke
under
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is under
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 half
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a years
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years
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year
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. Turning to the details, in the research of reasons, more
that
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than
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60%
people
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of people
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to
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apply
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wrap up smoking is better
for
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apply
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physical
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physically
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 in public which is the main
causes
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cause
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. Interestingly, under the 10 years old generation can show that they can consider
about
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apply
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their health because
this
 percentage is the highest number
almost
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in almost
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 three quarters. After that, the financial problems are popular reason exceeded 30 % in total.
However
, the recent physical statement is not
common
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a common
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 reason which is less than
one fifth
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one-fifth
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 out of one hundred.
On the other hand
, in the diagram on how long
to
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it
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take
Wrong verb form
takes
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 the time.
Overall
, after half
year
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a year
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 and an annual, they are occupied at 56%. Especially, until after 6 months population is the largest percentage.
In contrast
, they cannot end up smoking after one month.
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