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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people consider that
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through out
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 the educational journey, from lower to higher levels,
facts
 are emphasised more as compared to developing practical skills.
However
, I am of the opinion that having strong theoretical knowledge has a greater significance in a variety of ways.
One
 of the
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 to focus on learning
facts
 is that background knowledge needs to be stronger. Without knowing the
facts
 whole-heartedly, students can never learn the appropriate practical implications of a subject. To illustrate
this
, for doctors anatomy is considered to be a
theory based
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 subject but in order to be a great surgeon,
one
 must master even the tiniest details of
this
 subject,
otherwise
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 he/she would end up being a disaster for society. The same is true for other fields
such
 as engineering, information and technology, agriculture, artistry and architecture etc. All these major fields
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 tremendous information and to excel in these subjects
one
 must be a keen learner. Another reason that favours
this
 idea is that primary schools specifically ought to teach theory because of its immense significance in
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 of career, later in adulthood,
for
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 mathematics and philosophy are thought to be comprised of
facts
 and figures, while in reality, they provide the
much needed
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 base for engineering and dramatics respectively.
Hence
, by observing
one
's ability to grasp these concepts and personal choices, teachers and family members can do career counselling of youngsters
accordingly
. In conclusion,
although
 some people give more value to
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 knowledge, I am of the opinion that focusing the
facts
 in educational institutions is the key to a successful future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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