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Some people think exposure to modern technology at an earlier age is good for children, while others claim that it is harmful to their development. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The two maps illustrate modifications in a town in England, namely Standoff, in a 30-year period from 1985 to 2015. Overall, a number of significant changes had taken place during the 30 years period in terms of the industrial estate and infrastructure ,as well as, the accommodation, which changed the place from a rural area to an urban city. In ,1985 the village was mostly unspoilt. There was only one small factory in the east and three huts, all of them on the top of the main road, which ran from the east to the west, with a wooden bridge at its middle.
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, there was a field in the west, and some scattered palm trees along the Themer river, used for sailing. In 2013, it hosted a variety of modifications. The most substantial one was a sophisticated industrial estate with factories, a power plant, and an oil production unit and high-rise buildings, belonging to the company's staff and an exclusive paved fork road. What's more, the city had become more residential by the construction of the two sets of skyscrapers;
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, the old cottages had still remained and only they were converted to the east. Interesting, while the town developed into an industrial city it
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 become greener, with increasing the number of trees around it. As the
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 modernization, the wooden bridge was supplanted by a steel one.
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