Some people choose a career according to the social status and salary it will give them. Others choose a career according to whether they will enjoy the work. Which do you think is the best way to choose a career?

Having a
job
is important for us to pay for our essentials and
also
to save up for
better
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future. While some
people
look for jobs based on the amount of salary and
job
title that companies offer, others search for jobs that will give them
work
satisfaction and
fulfillment
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. In my opinion, having a fulfilling
career
is essential as it will provide enjoyment at
work
, as well as
health
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benefit
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People
who enjoy doing what they do will not feel like working to earn money at all. Because they like what they do, they are very likely to enjoy themselves working together with like-minded colleagues; they would not even notice that time passes each day.
For example
, if
people
, who enjoy tutoring,
work
as teachers, they will not only get
work
satisfaction by giving lessons to the children but
also
meet others who have the same passion.
Such
people
also
tend to be more successful in their
career
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careers

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.
Therefore
, it is necessary to have a
career
that gives
job
satisfication
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satisfaction

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Work
stress has been highlighted lately as one of the factors that
contributes
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to mental health issues. Due to high demanding
work
, more and more
people
are getting stressed, and it is making them mentally unhealthy.
This
is especially terrible for
people
who chose the
job
not because they would enjoy it but because they would earn more. The stressful
job
usually
force
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employees to
work
against the clock which, in turn, affects their social life.
Hence
, it is essential that
jobseekers
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job seekers

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keep
this
factor in mind when looking for a
job
. We spend at least half of our lifespan working. Would it be better to have a fulfilling
career
or a high-earning
job
? I feel that we need to put our happiness
first
, among others, by doing what we love and let our precious time passes.
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