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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is distinctively stated in any countries law, how a defendant’s previous
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wrong doings
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 can affect them in a trial. Some countries,
such
 as
United
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 Kingdom and Australia help offenders shadow their unlawful past from the
jury
 when giving their final verdict. In my opinion,
this
 is an unbiased method and should be changed.
Therefore
 I agree with the lawyer’s suggestion to amend
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 so that the
jury
 can give a balanced verdict.
First
 of all, if an offender has done a minor offence, normally the charges are dropped. But if the offence is
life threatening
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 or disturbs peace it should be dealt with severely.
For instance
, a criminal can commit a
crime
, which is inferior to the
crime
 he/she is about to commit
next
. While there is no method of predicting if the criminal will continue with
this
crime
 spree the
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law makers
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 should take
measure
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 to suppress
this
.
Furthermore
, there could be
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 reason of doubt as to predicting whether a
law breaker
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 would commit the same
crime
 or any other more than once, which is why
jury
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 should consider giving thought to the criminals past
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 to make the right decision. While there is a chance that a criminal will learn a lesson after being accused and punished there is
low
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 possibility that it would happen in reality. In conclusion, it is important for a
jury
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an offenders
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 past criminal records to make the right decision in a court, which
also
 will have a positive impact on the reduction of
crime
 rates in a country.
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