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Nowadays there is an increase in people with an unhealthy diet and not doing enough physical exercises. What do you think might be the reason? What can be done to encourage people to have a healthier lifestyle?

#people #diet #exercises #reason #lifestyle
In these
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 days, It is undeniable that health
problems
is
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 one of the
problems
 that everybody should be aware especially the
declination
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 of
consumption
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consuming
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 healthy
food
 and sufficient exercising. In the following paragraphs, both causes and some sensible solutions will be presented. The main factor that involve
with
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a decrease in
people
 with healthy
food
 and enough
exercises
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exercise
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 is
lack
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 of efficient
government
 management,
thus
 the minor
problems
 followed.
For example
, an increase of junk
food
 restaurant which is
easily
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 access due to unsuitable city planing or high prices of healthy diet
such
 as olive oil that has a lower toxic than others. In some cities,
people
 do not have enough area for exercising because of the limitation of living space or shortage of parks.
Moreover
, lacking
of
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knowledge for considerable about the effects
from
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of
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 health issues leads to
ignore
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 to take care
themselves
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.
From
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 the above reason, these
problems
 should be solved by developing
government
 management. The
price
 of
food
 should be regulated
for instance
 almost
products
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 that contain
a
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high sugar are to have a high
price
accordingly
 or
government
 declares the suitable ceiling
price
.
Additionally
, a rise of parks and comfortable footpaths could encourage
people
 to have more movements and exercises.
Besides
, obeying the rules of the
people
 is one of the vital
role
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.
People
 should aware of having a healthier lifestyle for reducing
the
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health issues. According to the information mentioned above, it can be concluded that
a
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 increase
of
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in
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fast
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fast-food
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food
 restaurants,
high
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the high
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price
 of healthy products,
lack
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a lack
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 of
educational
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education
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 and not sufficient exercising
area
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areas
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 can cause the
declination
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decline
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 of healthier behaviour, and it should be solved by
capable
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a capable
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government
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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