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Some claim that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women
The
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competitive
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 is a feature that has become increasingly present among people. Not only in the past but
also
 in the present day it is able to promote an unfair race between
men
 and
women
. Some people believe that
this
behavior
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 is much more present in
men
 and I totally agree with the assumption.
First
 and foremost, society
tend
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 to see
men
 as a natural competitor since they are considered stronger.
For instance
, in the past, they were seen as providers to the family,
in other words
, they needed to hunt and fight to maintain a house.
Although
 nowadays the ideas and facts are different and are in constant changes, they continue competitive since society created these ideas about them and the job
labor
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 keep
this
 competition among them.
Secondly
, different from
men
,
women
 were always seen as
a
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fragile. Whereas
men
 were strong and full of stamina and bravery,
women
 were and until today are considered weak and without
ability
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 to make successful decisions.
Therefore
,
this
 type of mindful enhances the idea that
about
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male ones
more
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are more
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 competitive
female
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than female
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 ones. Take as an example the difficulty faced by
women
 to move up the career ladder.
Finally
, biologically speaking the male sex presents a high concentration of testosterone, which is a type of sex hormone, related to different types of
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Moreover
,
this
 hormone can be associate
to
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with
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 aggressiveness.
For example
, some international research demonstrates that the presence of testosterone,
ten
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ten-time
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time
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 higher in
men
, can promote a style of
life
 much more aggressive and competitive. Another vital fact about
this
 is that during elderhood the concentration of
this
 hormone diminishes potentially,
in other words
,
men
 became calmer when they are elderly. In conclusion, the presence of competition between both genders is a natural process of
the
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life
.
However
, due to facts and ideas imposed by society,
men
 tend to be much more competitive. Not only in the private
life
 but
also
 in the
work
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work-life
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life
 since a prestigious career is seen as a symbol of success.
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