Some claim that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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competitive
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is a feature that has become increasingly present among people. Not only in the past but
also
in the present day it is able to promote an unfair race between
men
and
women
. Some people believe that
this
behavior
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is much more present in
men
and I totally agree with the assumption.
First
and foremost, society
tend
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to see
men
as a natural competitor since they are considered stronger.
For instance
, in the past, they were seen as providers to the family,
in other words
, they needed to hunt and fight to maintain a house.
Although
nowadays the ideas and facts are different and are in constant changes, they continue competitive since society created these ideas about them and the job
labor
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keep
this
competition among them.
Secondly
, different from
men
,
women
were always seen as
a
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fragile. Whereas
men
were strong and full of stamina and bravery,
women
were and until today are considered weak and without
ability
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the ability
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to make successful decisions.
Therefore
,
this
type of mindful enhances the idea that
about
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male ones
more
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are more
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competitive
female
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than female
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ones. Take as an example the difficulty faced by
women
to move up the career ladder.
Finally
, biologically speaking the male sex presents a high concentration of testosterone, which is a type of sex hormone, related to different types of
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Moreover
,
this
hormone can be associate
to
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with
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aggressiveness.
For example
, some international research demonstrates that the presence of testosterone,
ten
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time
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times
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higher in
men
, can promote a style of
life
much more aggressive and competitive. Another vital fact about
this
is that during elderhood the concentration of
this
hormone diminishes potentially,
in other words
,
men
became calmer when they are elderly. In conclusion, the presence of competition between both genders is a natural process of
the
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life
.
However
, due to facts and ideas imposed by society,
men
tend to be much more competitive. Not only in the private
life
but
also
in the
work
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work-life
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life
since a prestigious career is seen as a symbol of success.
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