Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society, like scientists and teachers, are more successful.

People
hold different views about whether
money
or social contributions are most successful. I am of the opinion that community dedication is more convincing whereas
money
can be reasonable in some situations. There are a host of reasons why
people
believe that individuals who devote themselves to the nation are the most successful.
First
and foremost, I personally think
people
succeed when they have elements
such
as contributing and making a nation become wealthy.
Besides
that
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they certainly have to earn income legally.
For instance
, scientists, teachers, doctors, lawyers,.. all of them have experienced a long hard learning time of at least 4-5 years to dedicate to society. Thanks to scientists,they have made Covid 19 Vaccines and co-ordinate with doctors to heal many
people
around the world. Until now, many
people
have a two-spot vaccination and the pandemic has been under control so their service is admirable. For teachers, they have been teaching kids,teenagers or adults a new language or IELTS,TOEIC to become a good student,a translator, an interpreter or even a new teacher in the future. A
second
point is that there are many billionaires
also
worthy of contribution to the community.One good illustration of
this
is Bill Gate co-founder of Microsoft with Bill& Melinda Gates Foundation aim to enhance healthcare and reduce extreme poverty across the world and
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expand educational opportunities. The
first
Vietnamese Billionaire Pham Nhat Vuong in Vietnam, founder and chairman of Vingroup.He has opened a hotspot Vinpearl land tourism, many luxury departments,a lot of supermarkets or created VinFast Cars, especially Landmark 81 skyscrapers,the highest building in Vietnam and the
second
in Northeast
Asian
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.Recently, his family has donated 2.287 billion for
Covid
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pandemic.
On the other hand
, it is often said that making a lot of
money
is successful.Some
people
might have
this
opinion because they think
money
will resolve all problems, purchase everything they want or have rights.
Therefore
, it is possible that they use
money
the wrong way. Nowadays, gambling evils, trading heroin and
money
laundering are more and more popular because they want to earn
money
easily and quickly and their standard of living is high and
luxury
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.
For example
, I have a cousin who is a big fan of
gamebling
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gambling
.He doesn’t go to work and earn
money
by play gambling.
Then
his family have to buy property to pay
debt
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to him. In conclusion,
money
can’t completely buy time, health and love unless
people
use
money
as a useful tool to earn it and make property for the nation.
Hence
, when
people
contribute, help together to make a strong,wealthy civilization and create legal
money
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial prosperity
  • capitalizing
  • luxury travel
  • exclusive experiences
  • contributions to society
  • humanitarian workers
  • lasting impact
  • highly subjective
  • cultural, societal, and personal values
  • comfort and security
  • deeper personal satisfaction
  • holistic understanding
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