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Many people say that they believe it is important to protect the environment but make no effort to do anything about it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What action do you think individuals should take to protect the environment?

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In
this
 modern world, every individual is only arguing about saving the nature of
this
 planet other than that there is no steps are being taken by themselves in
this
 case. In the below essay, we will elaborate on the above behaviour and the necessary step that every person should take to preserve our environment for the future.
First
, the public is very busy with their everyday life because of their jobs and businesses. Almost every adult on
this
 planet, regardless of gender, is either hooked up to their employment or with their business schedules as they have only a little or almost have no time to spare to carry out
such
 environmental activities.
For instance
, many people around the world involving in providing demonstrations to the public to bring awareness about the environmental problems, but the reach is still minimal.
Therefore
, the main reason for society's dull interest in carrying nature protecting activities is because of their modern lifestyle and commitments. Alternatively, I believe, for one, by following rules like avoiding personal motorized vehicles for short distances or inside cities and improvise the usage of cycles and public transports will eventually reduce the carbon dioxide emissions resulting in lower air pollution.
For example
, in countries like Singapore, the majority of the society are taking public transportations and are encouraged to use bicycles by constructing special lanes for bicycling across the city.
Second
, every individual should avoid using plastic bags and should bring their own bags to markets and shops,
thus
, reducing plastic waste.
Hence
, air pollution and plastic problems can be curbed by taking the above-mentioned actions to preserve our environment. To conclude, even though we are bound with our timeless commitments, it is absolutely necessary to be obliged to the above-mentioned set rules to preserve our environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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