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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Modern advancements in the fields of information technology and household work have undergone a tremendous evolution in order to make lives more convenient but some
people
 consider that these devices have
further
 raised the difficulty levels.In my opinion, I think that
this
 modernisation was much-needed by the humans and it has saved
the
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mankind from a lot of extra effort. One reason
of
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 favouring the idea of recent advances being useful in relieving stress is that by using advanced machinery for routine household chores, one can save a lot of time and energy,
for example
, automatic washing machines have revolutionised the method of doing laundry. Previously,
people
 used to spent hours just on getting their clothes washed, whereas, nowadays many tasks can easily be managed alongside laundry by using the advanced machinery.
Hence
, one can save time and utilise it more constructively, causing an obvious decline in strain related to workload. Another reason is that stress has reduced significantly because of the newly introduced applications in
communication
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 sector, namely Whatsapp, Instagram and Skype etc.Due to these advancements,
people
 feel more connected despite
of
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long distances. In the modern era,
people
 are bound to live apart due to
compulsion
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 of jobs or for educational purposes. In
such
 a difficult situation, a large proportion of
population
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 is prone to
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 affected
with
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 certain issues
such
 as anxiety and depression.
Therefore
, by using modern communication applications these problems can be timely and effectively prevented. In conclusion, while some
people
 might consider using labour-saving devices a source of difficulty, I am of the point of view that these modern tools, be it related to the field of technology or household tasks achievement, are of great significance in decreasing the level of
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 problems in society.
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