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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Modern advancements in the fields of information technology and household work have undergone a tremendous evolution in order to make lives more convenient but some
people
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 consider that these devices have
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 raised the difficulty levels.In my opinion, I think that
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 modernisation was much-needed by the humans and it has saved
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mankind from a lot of extra effort. One reason
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 favouring the idea of recent advances being useful in relieving stress is that by using advanced machinery for routine household chores, one can save a lot of time and energy,
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, automatic washing machines have revolutionised the method of doing laundry. Previously,
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 used to spent hours just on getting their clothes washed, whereas, nowadays many tasks can easily be managed alongside laundry by using the advanced machinery.
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, one can save time and utilise it more constructively, causing an obvious decline in strain related to workload. Another reason is that stress has reduced significantly because of the newly introduced applications in
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 sector, namely Whatsapp, Instagram and Skype etc.Due to these advancements,
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 feel more connected despite
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long distances. In the modern era,
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 are bound to live apart due to
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 of jobs or for educational purposes. In
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 a difficult situation, a large proportion of
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 is prone to
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 affected
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 certain issues
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 as anxiety and depression.
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, by using modern communication applications these problems can be timely and effectively prevented. In conclusion, while some
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 might consider using labour-saving devices a source of difficulty, I am of the point of view that these modern tools, be it related to the field of technology or household tasks achievement, are of great significance in decreasing the level of
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 problems in society.
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