CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. however, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy. what is more important, personal privacy or public safety?

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from town centres to outside many businesses. It ideal tool to identify and reduce
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of criminals.
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of citizens life.
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of the latest
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of humanity, which
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in towns, made police work simpler. It not only
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to find robber or gang
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people mentally and prevent potential crimes in future. Because of it, I think that public
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always more important than personal privacy.
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anywhere, but more in city security
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radar and put speed limits, and in town. In the
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of cities easy to find
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banks or
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. If
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happened, not difficult to
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a spider web. It
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that
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because even
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on your phone can send information to someone.
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big
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mental influence
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anyone and prevent
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potential
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impact
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people
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number of crimes; I think that public
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is more important.
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