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sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions?

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Global warming causes
sea
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 levels to rise rapidly.
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 phenomenon affects all creatures living on
land
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 tremendously and without actions being taken, all human beings and other
species
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 will no longer be able to live on the planet as there will be no
land
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 left to do so. In the following paragraphs, examples of relevant
problems
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 and possible solutions to enhance the situation will be discussed in detail. The increase
of
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sea
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level
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 leads to
numbers
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 of serious
problems
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 associated with
land
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 usage management and animal habitat
lost
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. As global
tempurature
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temperature
temperatures
 continue to rise, more glaciers
melt down
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 and resulted as water that travels down to oceans and ended up taking over lands in which human live. Losing parts of
lands
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 can cause detrimental effects to
people
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 like landowners and other
people
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 who rely on the property. Seaside areas are at greater risks
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 to other areas. Unfortunately, these areas use their location in order to attract
people
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 to visit the area and make money from the visitation which means they are attached to the area and when the rising
sea
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 levels
caused
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 the
land
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 to disappear, the
people
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 will suffer serious financial
problems
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. Another arising problem is animal habitat
lost
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. Like
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a human
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human
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humans
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, animals are affected by the increase
of
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sea
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level
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 and the decrease of available
land
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 left. If humans are left will less
land
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, they will explore more
land
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 and doing so means taking away more of
wild life's
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wildlife's
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 habitat. With the declining number of many endangered
species
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, it is likely that these
species
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 will eventually go extinct if the problem
is not solve
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 immediately. The only solution to prevent
further
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 damage from rising water
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level
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levels
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 is to stop the continuation of global temperature rise. Global warming is
the
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 issue that requires
a practical and effective solutions
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a practical and effective solution
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 as the issue constantly causes many more environmental
problems
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. One thing that can be done is to help the situation is to choose alternative sources of energy to use. Clean energy
produce
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 less
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gasses and required
less
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 ingredients to make. Another thing is to help raise awareness about the current situation of environmental issues in order to provide better understanding in a hope of having more sustainable
people
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 in the world. In conclusion, the rising water
level
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 impacts all creatures on the planet and require proper measures to minimize the damage.
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 problem must be taken care of in order to keep the balance of nature and to ensure safety for all
species
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.
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