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Feasts are prevalent among many nations the

world

over. It seems that many are interested in taking part in festivals regardless of their religion or culture. Somehow the public is merely interested in having fun and sharing their joy with others and doesn’t really want to perceive and appreciate the purpose behind

such

events. On the one hand, living in today’s competitive and fast-paced

world

has deprived

people

of having adequate time to spend on unworldly or traditional issues.

In other words

, when

people

are in a serious lack of time they might neglect the true meaning behind so many things and

instead

, would rather work on and deal with their primary needs and requirements.

Therefore

, one considers joining a festival as a sanctuary away from all the hustle and bustle of living in today’s

world

and puts less importance on the meaning behind it. In fact, without having one’s basic needs addressed, there is little chance to enhance their religious or traditional literacy.

On the other hand

, many of these festivals root in ancient cultures or archaic traditions which means that the genuine philosophy behind

such

events not

also

does not match our modern lifestyle or mindset but might

also

be in a drastic contradiction with one’s rituals or beliefs nowadays.

For example

, there is a festival called ‘fire’ which is held at the end of each solar year in Iran; its main purpose roots in ancient times when

people

worshipped fire. As of today, nearly nobody worships fire in Iran but they still enjoy the tradition of celebrating its existence and enjoy the time spent during

this

festival. To conclude, festivals are so commonly liked by

people

around the

world

. In my viewpoint, whether or not they have a meaningful purpose behind them, they are a great chance to gather folks together and enjoy others’ company.

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