Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

SULT TAKE TEST AGAIN Question 1 / 1 Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and
this
sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree? In
modern
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the modern
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era, prominent
personalties
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personalities
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are well-known for their materialistic possession and style more than their accomplishment,
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majority
mijority
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the mijority
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of
masses
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the masses
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apperhend
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apprehend
that
this
influences the
socitey
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society
and youth negatively.I strongly agree with the
statament
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statement
as the young generation of our
conutry
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country
get distracted and try to
amuliate
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emulate
ameliorate
their
behivour
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behaviour
in real life. To commence with,
youngesters
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youngsters
deviated from their path as they follow the
emient
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eminent
people and see them as their role model since most of the famous persons are not well-educated that result,student to think education is not important to be successful. No wonder
this
trend has
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impact on their career as education is
powerful
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a powerful
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weapon to change the world.
for instance
,
karshima
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Karishma
karma
kapoor
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is one of the recognised
actrees
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actress
of
bollywood
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with
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passed qualification.Mostly she is notable for her personal life and fashion rather than, her talent
this
may change the perception to become
populor
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popular
.
Secondly
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the youth are not enough mature to understand it required a lot of hard work and dedication to move ahead
towords
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towards
glory which can not be attainable over a night.
Moreover
, they admire celeb
fasinating
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fascinating
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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, bank balance and fame.
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they get distracted easily
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in the world of
internet
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the internet
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where
infromation
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information
spread like a flash. To exemplify mostly
teenage
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teenagers
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wish to have
physique
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a physique
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like hero,
heroiens
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heroine
heroines
or say
sportperson
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sportsperson
sport person
but they
dont
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don't
realize it
need
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regular exercise and discipline to look fit
everyday
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. Overall the future of the country is moving in a path of negligence now
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high time to make them more aware
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actual victory is and innovate moral
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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