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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Being
a
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popular has its own pros and cons.
Media
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 sometimes treat them poorly, in order to get their job done.
However
, I believe that public figures are humans too and they need privacy as we normal people are. Nowadays, becoming popular is quite easy. Every other person wants to become
a
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famous and youngsters mostly look up to the
hollywood
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Hollywood
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bollywood
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 celebrities. They want to imitate them and tv or other social
media
 platforms provide them adequate details in no time. Tv reporters are always around
big
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the big
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name
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names
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 and they
dont
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don't
 spare a moment to get their clips and broadcast
it
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them
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 to the people for their TRP.
Generally
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 it is good for celebrities to get the attention for their career and being in news for some or other reasons.
However
, often
media
 forgets that they are
also
 like us and have feelings too. But since people are more interested in knowing
such
 famous person's day to day life
such
 as from their routine
skin care
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 to their love life,
media
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the media
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 is trying hard to get
those information
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that information
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 in the form of videos or interviews wherever possible. To do so, they
dont
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don't
 even have a thought whether it is a correct time
approach
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to approach
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 them
ot
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or
 not? which result
into
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in
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 sometimes
undermine
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undermining
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 their private moment.
For instance
, Tv actor died
by
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of
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 a heart
attac
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attack
 and
media
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the media
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 had not spared a single moment to capture his mother.
This
 is cruel that you
dont
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don't
 give peace to do the rituals at his funeral. So in conclusion, I strongly believe that
media
 must maintain distance at certain
occassion
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occasions
occasion
 and live their life privately.
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