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Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems. discuss cause and effect and Suggest possible solutions and give your own opinion.

#pollution #countries #effect
As the world is growing day by day, there are advantages and disadvantages. One of the main disadvantages is the emerging environmental problems. These natural issues have become a real concern that most of the developed and
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developing countries are taking initiatives to solve the current issues or finding alternatives to overcome the situation. Every year the report from the
censex
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Sensex
census
 says the population is increasing, so the number of vehicles on the road is
also
 increasing. Till now we have only petrol and diesel cars and bikes. Crude oil is the natural resource from which petrol and diesel
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 extracted. The availability of
this
 crude oil has reduced drastically in
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recent years. As an alternative to the above problem,
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automotive companies have invented
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vehicles that can be run from electricity. Electricity was
initially
 produced from coal which is a non-renewable resource. Later, electricity was
also
 produced from solar energy. "As the consumption of electrically powered goods
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 increased, the natural substance of coal will be used completely at the global level", says the world nature control association.
As a result
 of
this
, many top countries like China have already started to face
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crisis
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 in the
last
 year. To reduce
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consumption the Government of China have imposed rules on the corporate and industrial offices that they can function only for a limited period of time during the day. In my opinion, we have to use the resource wisely and leave a better future for the
next
 generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Renewable resources
  • Conservation
  • Sustainable development
  • Biodiversity
  • Pollutants
  • Toxic waste
  • Deforestation
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Fossil fuels
  • Alternative energy
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