Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree?

The major source of serious
illness
and
death
in the whole world nowadays is smoking.
Therefore
, in regard to public health, cigarettes and other
tobacco
products
should be prohibited.I agree that smoking is a danger to human health and should be prohibited.
Firstly
,those people who smoke usually Do not have the repercussion in mind towards their health from smoking habits and
thus
continue making a daily trend
however
lowering their body immune which they end up having serious
illness
and
death
.
In addition
,the
government
has established smoking zones which are underutilized
although
not in all town
centre
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consequently
putting the public at risk
so
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the
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another
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other
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alternative is prohibiting cigarettes and other
tobacco
products
.
For example
,
a
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research done by
the
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Nairobi
university
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shows that 80% of lung cancer cases are caused by smoking.
Therefore
,it is imperative for the
government
to put
the
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strict measures on smoking to reduce serious
illness
and
death
in the community.
Secondly
,companies that produce
tobacco
should have a strict policy that stands for the safety of the public since
this
company create employment
therefore
cannot be done away with but
on
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alternative be supported.
In addition
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tobacco
products
should be highly taxed to reduce frequent intake by people as they will be expensive.
For example
in Rwanda,
tobacco
products
are 70% taxed and since
then
Rwanda has had the lowest cases of lung cancer.For
this
, reason the
government
has a big role in the prevention of
illness
and
death
in the community
To conclude
,people have a big role to play in
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prevention of serious
illness
and
death
by stopping
to smoke
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while
the
government
follows
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