Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree?
The major source of serious prevention of serious
illness
and death
in the whole world nowadays is smoking. Therefore
, in regard to public health, cigarettes and other tobacco
products
should be prohibited.I agree that smoking is a danger to human health and should be prohibited. Firstly
,those people who smoke usually Do not have the repercussion in mind towards their health from smoking habits and thus
continue making a daily trend however
lowering their body immune which they end up having serious illness
and death
. In addition
,the government
has established smoking zones which are underutilized although
not in all town centre
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centres
consequently
putting the public at risk so
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the
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another
other
alternative is prohibiting cigarettes and other Correct word choice
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tobacco
products
. For example
, a
research done by Correct article usage
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the
Nairobi Correct article usage
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university
shows that 80% of lung cancer cases are caused by smoking. Capitalize word
University
Therefore
,it is imperative for the government
to put the
strict measures on smoking to reduce serious Correct article usage
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illness
and death
in the community. Secondly
,companies that produce tobacco
should have a strict policy that stands for the safety of the public since this
company create employment therefore
cannot be done away with but on
alternative be supported. Correct your spelling
an
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,
tobacco
products
should be highly taxed to reduce frequent intake by people as they will be expensive. For example
in Rwanda, tobacco
products
are 70% taxed and since then
Rwanda has had the lowest cases of lung cancer.For this
, reason the government
has a big role in the prevention of illness
and death
in the community To conclude
,people have a big role to play inAdd an article
the
illness
and death
by stopping to smoke
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smoking
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