Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Ohter argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many
people
are
weak hearted
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like they accept their failure very easily without even trying for
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time.While there are
people
who just do not give up
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their situation they keep on trying to improve but just do not feel sad and sit around.
This
essay will delve both the perspective and will end with my own opinion on
this
matter. On the one hand, there are
various
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group of
people
gets disheartened even from small failures in life as they cannot able to face the fact they have failed in certain.
For instance
, if a student
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less
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marks in the subject in which his interest lies the most,he gets so disappointed that he not only
loose
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interest in
subject
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but begin to hate it.Research has found that
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of behaviour is mainly found in individuals who are unable to accept defeat with all of
guts
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their guts
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and leave the task without even giving another shot.
Moreover
,
this
might have
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impact on their health like some
people
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unable to bear the sight of loss and faces depression and
anixety
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anxiety
issues.
On the contrary
, there are some group of
people
who has a sportsman spirit in them which do not allow them to just quit and keep motivating them to keep on trying.
These kind
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of
people
not only learn from their
last
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past
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mistakes but
also
try to acquire new skills in order to overcome the mistakes.
In addition
to that, individuals with
this
attitude will not at all gets disappointed even in their worse situation and give their more than 100% to improve the situation.
Conquently
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Consequently
, they overcome the hurdles in their way and eventually achieve success in their lives.
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the end of the day, there are both types of
people
in the world but in my
opinion
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if someone wants to be successful in his life one should learn to welcome defeat and failures with both hands and try to be
reslient
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resilient
in every
situations
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of life.
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