In most countries, young people form a large proportion of those who are unemployed. Why is this the case, and what can be done to solve the problem?

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Numerous statistical studies all over the world have revealed a
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domination of young people among the unemployed.
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a problem cannot
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only one root cause and one universal cure. The global financial crisis leads to
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of job markets and
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generation loses the competition for vacancies against more experienced adults. Lack of background and practical skills is always a serious argument for
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to put aside high school and university graduates and
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ready-to-use experts. With much reluctance companies invest in training and professional
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of their
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. At the same time, youth has unrealistic expectations about positions that are supposed to correspond
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knowledge and salaries that ought to satisfy their needs. Mostly, youngsters are not psychologically ready to accept low-paid and low-qualified jobs. To achieve significant improvement of
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situation, various measures could be undertaken.
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of all, governments must force educational organizations to shift the focus on practical up-to-date subjects rather than theory,
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the relations between institutes and businesses.
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, employers should be given
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tax benefits for the training costs and hiring students.
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fact, that regulated by law minimal quotas for age groups in stuff helps young and elder people a lot. To summarize, the issue of youth unemployment reflects some negative economic trends and,
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, apparent discrimination of the most perspective group of society. Authorities of all countries have to take responsibility for
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and guarantee equal rights in getting
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and worthy
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for all employable citizens.
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