Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence.

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needs
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education
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is every human's right. Whether provided by their own government or aid from the rich nation.
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, it is
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to take care of their own
people
rather than
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on others.
One
rich
country
can share their resources with the
one
who is in need at the time of crisis.
Nevertheless
,
one
nation can not totally depend on the other for
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basic necessities
such
as food or
education
. Each
country
has their own budget for providing facilities
such
as
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with affordable fees, etc to their
people
and
one
can not cut down from them to provide others.
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,
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is
one
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wealthy nations compared to Bhutan. But
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will not provide every now and
then
unless it is an emergency, as they need to look after their own nation's requirements too. Rather, the poor
country
should ask for the options and advice from growing countries, through which it can generate more employment and income and so
people
can easily procure the
education
for their kids and at least meal for two times. Due to the fact that you will receive
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for twice or max three times but no
country
would keep helping you for your day to day life.
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,
although
Bhutan is the poorest
country
, it can ask
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for
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how they utilise electronic gadgets to provide
education
online and not money from them for the same.
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way they can ask another
country
for employment options to create more jobs for their
people
. In conclusion,
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country
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countries

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should think of their own
people
how to keep them happy meeting their daily needs.
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