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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree?

#crime #rate #advance #technology
It is true that
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modern
technology
 assists to reduce illegal activities around the world
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 to primitive
time
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.
Technology
 can help to find
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 by providing
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 efficient way of working. I partially agree with
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, I will give some reasons
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To begin
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 CCTV, screener, biometric machine, became the legal authorities track down the movements of lawbreakers. For
this
 reason, the state and the police have installed surveillance cameras on
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important places that
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 before
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 take place.
For example
, in Indian government planted CCTV cameras
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, the rape and
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 harassment rate is going fall.
As a result
, the offenders
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 afraid to attempt any crimes.
However
,
on the other hand
, there are a couple of drawbacks of
this
 advancement of
technology
, which leads to
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 advance level illegal acts.
In addition
, hacking is one of them because
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the
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stolen
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 valuable information and data and
also
 money.
For instance
, few years
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,
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Bangladesh lost 500 million dollars from
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with in
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 time
thus
, the delinquents used high tech computers .
Furthermore
, digital offenders
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 people and earn money
this
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because
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 easy access
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 information. To sum up, it is undeniable truth new artificial
technology
 help people to get justice in a short time as well as
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 way to collect data of any lawbreakers but we cannot deny the side effects of it.
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