every year several languages dies out,some people think that this is not important because ;life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world . to what extend do you agree or disagree

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proportion of workers, who were working in the six various employment fields in 1975 and 1995 of the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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