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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday.

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Some
people
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 believe that in future most of the individuals would prefer to enjoy their vacations trips within their homeland. In my opinion
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 vice versa; nowadays,
people
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 are excited to explore new
places
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 and want to enjoy their holidays by travelling abroad. These days, travelling is becoming cheaper.
Tourism
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 is a major part of the huge income of a nation. Most of the tourist companies are launching low packages to bring more
people
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 inside the territory, which is
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 supported by the government. Countries like Malaysia,
Philippines
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 and Australia are providing economical packages for visitors to enjoy their recreational trips.
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, due to competitive packages, it is easier for everyone to enjoy their holidays abroad.
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,
people
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 can get information about their destination through social media which is helping and
promoting
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tourism
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 abroad.
People
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 are making videos in different
places
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 and
provide
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 details about their experiences, even they share the expenses which they bear during their visit and share it on the internet through
youtube
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 and Facebook. The government is
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 sharing information
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 visitors on their official websites to enhance
tourism
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 at different
places
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.
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,
people
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 are choosing to discover those
places
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 which they have never visited before. Though, some
people
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 do not prefer visiting abroad because of cultural or lingual hesitation. They choose their own land to explore more
places
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 which they had never visited before as they feel more comfortable communicating with locals in their mother tongue.
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, they can spend some time with their friends and family in their homeland.
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, there is no issue of passports and visas in their own
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.
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, they prefer to spend vacations in their own counties. To summarize, the convenience of finding the right place
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 tourist destinations and low-cost offers can drive more and more
people
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 to go on vacations to other
places
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. I believe, it is human nature to explore different traditions and heritages, which would increase
tourism
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 rather than visiting the home nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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