Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

it has been said that the relevant
solution
to tackle with
problem
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the problem
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of increasing
vehicles
on road and environmental impurity is
rise
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a rise
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in the fare of fossil fuels. I, myself totally disagree with
this
notion and in
this
upcoming
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will discuss the main reasons with
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solution
and
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examples
.
to begin
with, in
this
modern era people prefer to use cars, bikes, buses and other
vehicles
to make
thier
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their
work easy and
efficent
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efficient
, but
this
create
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creates
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some environmental problems and traffic jams, but
higher
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a higher
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price rate of petrol is not a solid
solution
.
firstly
, in
this
modernity using
vehicles
became an easy way for
indivisuals
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individuals
, for
this
no one will give a
second
thought about the price of petrol
becuase
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because
it not going to impact their weekly or monthly wages.
for example
, if
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earn
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nearly $1000 per week and
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diesel
deisel
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or petrol increased by $10, still does not have any effect.
secondly
,
vehicles
are not the main reason for contamination,there are many other things which
also
affect
atmosphere
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such
as, factories,deforestation, dumping garbage in
river
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the river
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or on the edge of roads and many more.
hence
, changes in
payment
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the payment
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of fossil fuels is not a perfect way.
furtehmore
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furthermore
, to combat
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the
problem
of
biosphere
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adequate
solution
should be taken by
authority
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the authority
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.
for instance
,
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government
governments
goevrnment
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should encourage inhabitants to plant
the
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trees and
this
can be started through the schools as
pupil
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pupils
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learn
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from their teachers and if they convey them to do
this
it will quite beneficial. apart from
this
,it is
also
our duty to look after our planet because we survive here and should not play with natural things.
last
but not least, we should save our flora and fauna because these
are
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also
exist
at
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on
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this
earth and the reason
of
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for
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this
extinction is either the cutting of trees and using mobile phones and
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other
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handheld gadgets.
hence
, nothing is impossible as
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"possible" is hidden in "
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impossible
", so we should think differently to save our earth. to sum
up
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with,it is clear that a single step cannot do anything,to vanish the main
problem
some perfect and relevant way should
followed
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by the regime. if there is any
problem
, but
solution
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the solution
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is
also
available. and not only
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government
governement
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the governement
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we should
also
do something
for
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about
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this
issue.
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