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The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.
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The given pie charts depict the percentage illustration of
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energy produced by various sources in a country from 1985 to 2003
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, it can be observed that oil was the biggest energy-giving source through the years.
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, Hydrogen remained the least among
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 modes, and even more, stood at the same index all the time. With regards the power sources increased in proportion, as one of the
most
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bright ones Natural has from 13% up to the 23%,
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 comes Coal with rose by 5%.
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, another renewable was
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 the bottom in 1985, by 2003 it equalised in rate with Hydrogen.
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, some of the energy sources went down in
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percentage amount, like Oil, which decreased by almost 15%, from 52% to 39%, relatively. Nuclear is one more example of
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 trend. It dropped up to 17% from 22%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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