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Some people believe that the whole family (grandparents, uncles and aunts) bringing up children is better then only parents. what is your opinion?

#people #grandparents #uncles #aunts #children #parents
Nowadays, in most
families
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 both parents work to afford expenses and offspring’s needs.A chunk of individuals opines that
,
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due to
hectic
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 schedule of parents it would be beneficial to raise teenagers in
joint
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the joint
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 family rather than in
nuclear
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the nuclear
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 family. I; have agreed with
former
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 opinion and I will discuss
in
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 the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, in families including grandparents and other family
members
 help
children
 the importance of each other and family
members
. They learn to share and support others in their difficult times as consequence they develop social skills that are beneficial for their future.
For instance
,
children
 with better communication skills enhance their chances of success they might offer
with
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opportunities,
otherwise
 not feasible .
Moreover
, in times of trouble financially and morally, grandparents help them and motivate them to achieve their goals.
In addition
, parents
left
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 with no time for the teenagers due to hectic schedules and work deadlines
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therefore
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therefor
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 juveniles might end up in
bad
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 company but living in
joint
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 family enable other
members
 to look after them and prevent them from any delinquencies.
On the other hand
, some people argue that
children
 become irresponsible when they are overly nurtured because grandparents fulfil their every wish as consequences they forget to appreciate.
Moreover
, they become attention
seeker
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 as their every need is met in
family
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as a result
 sometimes they rudely behave with the others. In conclusion, I believe that
children
bringing
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 up in the whole family teach them vital survival values
such
 as sharing and helping others in difficult situations and they
also
 get support from family
members
 too.
However
; there are some drawbacks
also
such
 as acting
responsible
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 when their every desire
met
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.
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