Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Many
people
opine that adverts
alude
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allude
elude
us towards unnecessary purchasing
although
others consider it as
catalyst
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between buyers and sellers. According to me,
commercials
improve the lifestyle of
people
and
helps
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businesses to grow easily but sometimes it
drawn
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the pocket of
purchaser
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the purchaser
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for nothing.
First
of all, it is not an easy task to be aware
about
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of
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every new and updated goods and
services
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service
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available in the market. So,
commercials
enhance the knowledge of consumers which is
the
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win-win situation for business holders and customers.
For example
, one of my
friend
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friends
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is
fashion
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a fashion
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freak but he has
hectic
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schedule. So, advertisement
make
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easy for him to know about new fashion trend and buy
accordingly
.
However
, in
this
modern era; many fake websites promote wrong descriptions and benefits of goods and try to fool the buyer with the help of influencing wrong results through video making or editing. As an example,
last
month I bought one cosmetic cream by the influence of merchandise on YouTube, but that promises were wrongful even results were detrimental for
skin
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. According to me,
commercials
if control by
sensorship
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censorship
sponsorship
then
, it is totally in the favour of
people
to be aware
about
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of
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products or services before
exchange
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the
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apply
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cash for wrong or outdated goods. Apart from
this
, in
this
pandemic situation,
people
do not have full access to
market
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then
,
commercials
introduce specifications of new items on users mobile
phone
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.
For example
, many businesses open their online stores and run their businesses
by
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the help of advertisements. In conclusion, if we do faith only on authentic sources and avoid impulsive shopping
then
advertisements are always in the favour of
people
to be updated with new shopping options which can enhance the lifestyle of
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the buyer
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buyer
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buyers
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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