Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believed that having more police on the streets is the best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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in insecurity in many states in
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recent.The general population feels that increasing the number of police will help reduce the level of crime in the countries.I personally agree with
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of the general opinion.
To begin
with,having many guards in patrol will help detect crime and guarantee immediate response to security alarms.
For example
,when there are a few police on a particular shift and many security alarms are calling,it means that response will be in turns and getting the culprits will become difficult.
This
makes it easy for gangs to recruit and multiply in the community.
Additionally
,having many detectives in service will lead to high tension among the criminals.They will be always
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trying to observe the laws because they are not aware of who is watching.
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will minimise the number of crime
occurencies
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occurrences
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in the community.An example is when there are three detectives in a neighbourhood of ten households.
Evil doers
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will not prefer living in
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a tensed
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environment
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they will revert their ways. In
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conclusion
,it is important for all
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Governments to intensify
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workforce in order to eliminate insecurity cases in the community.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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