Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages a higher level of violence in that society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Police
officers having
a
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a gun
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guns
in the
community
is a topic in public
dormain
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domain
as it is felt to encourage brutality.I disagree with the statement as
i
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will elaborate more in the essay
Firstly
,it is imperative for
a
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security enforcers
a security enforcer
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security
enforcers to have
guns
as it is
prerequisite
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a prerequisite
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since it is part of the instrument they use to
enhace
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enhance
security
or deal with criminals.Society
fear
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police
officer
as they prefer doing what is right
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therefore
it become easier for them to manage
security
in the
community
.
In
addition
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law breakers
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lawbreakers
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come to a
stand still
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standstill
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or run for their life wherever there is
presence
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the presence
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of armed
police
officer
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officers
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such
that they would not wish to be
cought
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caught
in the process of breaking the
law
.
For
instance
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in Rwanda,
law
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the law
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is well established since all
law
enforcer
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enforcers
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have
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guns
with them
hence
people feel more
secured
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secure
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as it is a norm in that
country
.For
this
reason,it is prudent for
police
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a police
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officer
to have a gun with them as it
bring
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brings
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peace in the
community
.
Secondly
,investors prefer a
country
that has orderly people to protect their property
thus
it
elaborate
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the benefit of a
police
officer
having a gun for
a
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an
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ordely
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orderly
order
society
hence
improving the economy of the
country
.
Moreover
country
with good
law
enforcement is a tourist attraction as they are assured of the
country
security
unlike
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,unlike
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violence.
For instance
, during
post election
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violence,armed
police
officers prayed an important role in bringing up
order
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the order
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in the
community
.It is absolutely
indipensable
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indispensable
to have
police
officers have
the
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guns
with them. To conclude
police
have
plethora
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of
option
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options
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to maintain order in
the
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apply
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society including
use
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the use
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of a gun to deal with criminals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • law enforcement
  • escalate
  • deter
  • overreaction
  • perceived safety
  • misuse of power
  • deterrent effect
  • law and order
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • civil liberties
  • use of lethal force
  • accountability
  • arms race
  • militarization
  • social fabric
  • statistical evidence
  • cultural attitudes
  • criminal behavior
  • policy implications
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