In the future, we will have more and more leisure time as machines will replace many of the tasks we do at home and work now. Discuss the benefits this will bring and also the problem it will cause. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Technical evaluation has become expanded day to day life. Some bulges of
people
believes
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that intelligent
technology
can replace
importance
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of human either at
work
or home. Somewhere,
i
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also
agree that
this
evolution will put
great
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impact on
advanced
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generation.
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, some
people
also
oppose
this
statement and they
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that
this
may be
issue
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an issue
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for the human.
To begin
with, every trend
have
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two
side
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sides
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of view. I will discuss
first
with
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the benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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of advanced
technology
for
human
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humans
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.
First
and most important,
people
will be
spent
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less time on
work
meanwhile, they
must
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spent
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their free time on
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extracurricular
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extra curricular
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extracurricular
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activities. Included, they follow their hobbies and make
them self
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themself
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happy.
Second
, It will become very helpful if only one person has
earn
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money in their family. They can earn money easily through robots which will help
in
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everywhere and any situation.
Additionally
,
those earner person
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that earner person
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can focus on extra things and earn more money for their family members.
Lastly
, it will reduce
physical
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load from
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a human
the human
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human
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humans
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.
For example
, now
people
can take too much
work load
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on their shoulder and
this
may be
harmfull
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harmful
for them. On the other
side
,
technology
has
also
dark
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side
.
Firstly
, hacking is
most
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dangerous
things
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happen
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that happen
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when
people
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are reliable
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reliable
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rely
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on
technology
.
For example
,
cyber crime
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cybercrime
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has been increased in
past
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the past
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few years and Every
nations
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nation
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suffer from
this
.
Secondly
, private information may be
leak
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very simply from
internet
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the internet
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and anyone can use that for blackmail.
This things
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is hardly happened
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hardly happens
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with
middle class
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people
but for celebrity and film star it
become
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trouble for them. At
last
,
inteligents
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intelligent
intelligence
nowadays
puts
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put
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their steps in working factories and mills. Somehow, it can be hard to get
work
perticular
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particular
those persons who
work
in factories due to robots
take
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to take
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role
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the role
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of them.
On
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conclusion, Government should give
very
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a very
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important role
for
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in
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getting
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a solution
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solution
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solutions
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about
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to
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this
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these
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problems. They should manage both equally and get chance of Rural
people
for
work
.
Other
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side
,they will focus on
introduce
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introducing
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new
technology
.

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