with the help of internet and television ,many people are becoming famous. Is this a positive or negative trend. Including examples.

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providing

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opportunities of being a

celebraty

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celebrity

to the pupil who

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internet

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became a current wave with merits and demerits ,which having an

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scale to the society we live. The idea of being renowned and

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became an addiction to

this

generation who used to stay

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world

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real life.

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concept of

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celebrity

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themselves

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videos or capturing news and views on their smartphone without concentrating on

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doing which they should finish

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time.

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internet

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leads

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very unhappy family time with

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career ,

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effects

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mentel

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mental

and physical health .

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, if we see the

tiktok

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TikTok

stars, who most of the time are busy

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apply

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own

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their own

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then

doing

study

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or household works or concentrating on

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, reflect their addiction of being noted by

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instead

of focusing on the real works of living, are after the unrealistic world fame . Recently Bangladesh

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this apps

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, because of its

excesive

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excessive

use of young star

then

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being on

study

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, shows the harmful side of the chance that

internet

and media providing to be a star. On the other side, the tendency of being

fashon

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fashion

style sometimes gives people lucky chance which they are looking for and awaited for

long

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. Many

diractors

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directors

of t.v shows

sellect

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their new faces with the help of

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currently popular tendency of

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down him/her self. To illustrate , if we see the talent hunt programs of Bangladesh we easily can sum up the

cnances

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changes

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people getting from

televation

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television

and

internet

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to light them up.

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bring

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hidden skills of persons on air and provide the push they need to be well-known. Raising

super stars

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is a perfect show of

this

kind

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talent

telent

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hunt program. on my view, it is a great platform to perform which offer

hope

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of being a star to the people who never imagine

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and make them confident

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their skills. In conclusion,

although

inetrnet

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internet

and t.v bestow human a

possiblities

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possibilities

of expressing

themsleves

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themselves

, we should not go with

flow

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and must have control on using

net

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and may not let it

over

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come

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the

real life

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of us.

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