You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, Explain your situation, Say why you feel unsure about living in the city Ask some questions about life in the city.

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Hello Amanda, I hope you are well. I just received

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wonderfull

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wonderful

news about the job which I attended an interview

last

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week. I was approved for the manager role that I've been aiming

for

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a long time. I'm excited

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about

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this

opportunity,

however

, I need to move from Florianópolis to your city São Paulo. Changing city makes me feel insecure, I have never lived in

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than Florianópolis. I heard that São Paulo has high numbers of violence in some regions and the public transportation is not so good. As you know, I don't have

driver

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licence, so I really need to count on quick and safe

transporation

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transportation

between my home and work,

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I'll need to live near to the office

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downtown. Do you know if

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the Vargem

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Pequena

neighborhood

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is near

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Downtown? I was looking for apartments to live in

this

area. Do you know if

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place is safe, even at night? In

this

new job, I believe it will be necessary to make extra work hours and I don't want to be in

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while returning

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home. Thank you in advance for providing me

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this

information. I really appreciate your support. Warm regards, Evelyn

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8 paragraphs

203 words

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